Poem for Laurel
Away From The Weather
In panties & lavender tank
she stays inside away from the weather.
Bare essentials in the unflappable back room:
turned down bed, shuttered open window, speedy ceiling fan,
side table with lamp, book & brimming water glass. Under
the bed, flip-flops, dust & cat hair. She stays there
not moving, sweat pooling in the crevices behind her knees:
drip, drip – left hand, then, flat against protruding hipbone forming
right angle triangle, an odd lapse in a bad mood. She is not aware
her foot has gone to sleep. She is not thirsty enough to drink, bored enough to read.
When the phone down the hall begins to ring
she moves onto her side, swipes damp hair out of her eyes. Listens.
The phone stops soon enough. The fan whirs. Hot.
Flat on her back again, she thinks about being hot.
She pictures tubes of sunscreen, parasols. Ice cubes, swimming holes.
Mostly she thinks about weather.
In panties & lavender tank
she stays inside away from the weather.
Bare essentials in the unflappable back room:
turned down bed, shuttered open window, speedy ceiling fan,
side table with lamp, book & brimming water glass. Under
the bed, flip-flops, dust & cat hair. She stays there
not moving, sweat pooling in the crevices behind her knees:
drip, drip – left hand, then, flat against protruding hipbone forming
right angle triangle, an odd lapse in a bad mood. She is not aware
her foot has gone to sleep. She is not thirsty enough to drink, bored enough to read.
When the phone down the hall begins to ring
she moves onto her side, swipes damp hair out of her eyes. Listens.
The phone stops soon enough. The fan whirs. Hot.
Flat on her back again, she thinks about being hot.
She pictures tubes of sunscreen, parasols. Ice cubes, swimming holes.
Mostly she thinks about weather.
9 Comments:
That last line nails the poem.
Dramatic set up to an extremely subtle close. Very well controlled, as it were, harvested details, images along the way, harvested from sensation, if that makes any sense(?) Can you possibly xpost it to the cafecafe blog ? I want to put into a didiessay
oops - that last comment was by me jack -- accidentally posted it under jenni's i.d. sorry --
--jack
Geez, I like this alot. I wish to heck I'd written it. That unflappable back room is just so damned good. The hip bone, the sleeping extremity, the parasol, the swimming hole. Thanks for this, D.
Summer humidity... whew! When the soul wishes to take leave. Nicely done.
Yeah, Dj, you've nailed something down here.
But given it enough play so that it still struggles...
This is a fine poem.
yrs-
Scott
Hey guys - thanks for stopping in - glad you found something to like in this. Sorry for taking so long to acknowledge your comments, was twisting a little about this one. But really, the comments greatly appreciated!
xodj
good one, dj. it really turned out fine. jim
i was very excited to find this once i started reading it.
again,
just wonderful!
luc u!~
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